根据提示和图片写短文。(12分)
提示:
根据所给图示,以“Wang Lei's Busy Day”为题,写一篇50词的短文,内容必须符合图意,语意连贯,句式规范,字迹工整。(正文第一句已给出)
Wang Lei's Busy Day
It was March 8th yesterday.__________________________
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(2001南京市中考题)
考生作文:
Wang Lei's Busy Day
It was March 8th yesterday.It was Women' 失分点① Day.Wang Lei went to shop to buy something失分点②.He buyed失分点③ a lot of things.After he came back to home失分点④,he cleaned the room and do the housework.When Wang Lei's mother came back,she saw 失分点⑤his son cooked 失分点⑥a lot of delicious food.His mother said to him,“You are a good boy.You're GREat!”
①Women'改为Women's不以s结尾的复数名词的所有格仍加“'s”。
②宜用do some shopping表示购物。
③buyed改为bought。
④home是副词,其前不加介词,故去掉介词to。
⑤根据上下文,此处saw宜改为found。
⑥cooked改为had cooked此处表示动作在过去已完成,应用过去完成时。(南京市一考生)
简评:
本文满分12分,该文章得8分,作者基本能按图意和提示,写出意思通顺,行文连贯的短文,但语言表达错误不少,出现了6个失分点。
参考范文:
Wang Lei's Busy Day
It was March 8th yesterday,and it was Women's Day.Wang Lei went to shop to do some shopping.He bought a lot of things.After he came back home,he cleaned the room and do the housework.When Wang Lei's mother came back,she found her son had cooked a lot of delicious food.His mother said to him,“You are a good boy.You are GREat!”